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I walk lightly,
still waking myself up,

it must be the egg shells,
     stuck in my feet,

I know,
I’m dirty,
despite
these six months clean,

in a dressing room
       trying on
             my own outfit
                     differently,

sure, my life could use some change,
this cashier just keeps ignoring me,

my eyes have lost
                       their flame

funny how I always feel
                       the same.

wide open,


“Hey man I love your poems,
They’re thought provoking!”


I wrote them

for you and the rain,
while I was enjoying
     a cigarette,

things you do
     when every kite
          you ever owned
               ended up in a tree.

nice to meet you,
my name is
Broken English

my  hobbies are
going the distance,
blowing out candles
and scratching my head
in confusion,


tell me something
I don’t know,

unspoken,

emotionally exploding
in the direction
of perplexing non-sense

wrote it down
     but lost it.
          picking the lint
              out of opinions
                    that probably belong in my pocket,

sitting heavy in my own mistakes.
Leaving finger prints everywhere,

turning myself in.


"Add this to your favourites just
Don't ask me what it means."


my inner child ran away.
©2008-2009 ~oldest-boy
:iconoldest-boy:

Author's Comments

[ my name is on the tip of your tongue. ]

[ add this to your favorites, just don't ask me what it means ]

[ I'm stuck in a coma, Stuck in a never-ending sleep ]

[ Insert useless information here ]

[ Oldest-Boy / Youngest-Man / Two Thousand Eight ]

[ Have You Seen Me? ]

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:iconmandachele:
this is my favorite of yours that you have written.
for real.
such amazing rhythm and rawness.
dude keep it up supahfresh ya digggggg :D

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he said, "i'm gonna get you lost and if you love me you'll come find your way back to me."
:iconoldest-boy:
yay!

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'SHARKS DON'T SLEEP' a collection of poems by Eric Hamilton.
:iconwellwornwings:
i love the mention of eggshells. this may be a good collaboration to my photo: here


i really like this.

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.......................................
well worn wings crumble
too tired to forgive
and too battered
to ever forget.
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:iconkneelingglory:
Hah. Totally feel that frustration. I can't even pick a favorite line in this, cuz its all great. :D

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:iconoldest-boy:
thank you, very much.

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'SHARKS DON'T SLEEP' a collection of poems by Eric Hamilton.
:iconoldest-boy:
thanks Lili, :P

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'SHARKS DON'T SLEEP' a collection of poems by Eric Hamilton.
:iconcyranicles:
I like the unfulfilled emotion that this poem gives off. Like you're trying to own up to everything you've ever done in front of the world, and you get hollow praise for it that makes you just want to say "no shit?"

let me know if that's at all what you were going for.

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Get it while it's hot! Poetry fresh of the presses! :thumb69775965: Glad to chat poetry or exchange comments anytime :)
:iconjaigurudevat:
is your name.... 'totally freakin amazing' cause that's what came to mind when i finished.
'floored' is another one.

"tell me something
i don't know" -- methylchloroisothiazolinone is an ingredient in most shampoos. :D

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nothing's gonna change my world...
:iconoldest-boy:
lmfao,
you're awesome.
thank you.

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'SHARKS DON'T SLEEP' a collection of poems by Eric Hamilton.

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