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Every scar
tells a story.
Torn glory
with NO
Fore warning,
Horrible
memories,
Asleep in
a Ocean
Of my own
Blood.


Abrupt? Sure.
These thoughts
are rough.
"Jumped from
the Frying Pan,"
into a field
of nails, and
I'm stuck.
Perhaps i was
Brainwashed,
Just Enough.


However,
Perfectly Strange,
Vision Blurred,
Fantasies Engaged.
I Vow to ruin
the falseness
You've staged.
Crumbling
every sand castle,
You Arrange.


Rattling the cage,
Heating the
Cold blood,
Within your
still, somehow
Living veins.
Jaw stuck in that
Dropped position.
Could you refrain
from embracing that
permanently
painted reaction
on your Unforgiving Face?


Alive, thanks to
My Imagination.
Corrosive voltage
Slow motion
Notions of "Make it stop!"
I Rattled your cage
For fun,
Days after I had
Picked the locks.
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:iconcordieb:
We are bred to think that the worst disappointments are those with no forewarning . . . But actually all disappointment hurts; whether forwarned or not. In reality forwarning only prolongs misery. I often simply remind myself not to stress for answers--for many times there really are none; as everyone has the right to change their minds. . . . and every thing must also die. . .

The only thing I know in this world that's permanent is change. . .

Great poem . . .
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:iconoldest-boy:
:d thank you.
and this poem has had several interpitations.
i'm curious as to yours.
You can send me a note,
we'll discuss it?
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:iconjenealia:
~Jenealia Sep 11, 2008   Writer
I love the imagery and the feeling of the poem... but I can't decide what it's about....
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:icontheobviouschild:
OK I am going to seem like a stalker, but dude, you are freaking awesome. There's such a strong voice in this piece, and so many brilliant lines. I love "jumped from the frying pan into a field of nails and I'm stuck", "crumbling every sand castle you arrange" and "corrosive voltage" ... and the last couple of lines blew me away. You're a slam superstar, methinks! :heart:
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:iconoldest-boy:
This is the best comment
i've recieved in quite a while...
You don't sound like a stalker
at all, wich is dissapointing.
i always wanted a stalker.

Thank you for the watch,
and the fave,
and most of all this comment.

<3
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:iconwellwornwings:
oh now this is quite a stunning piece.

i shall be reading you often.

thanks for your comment on my collab with -youinventedme ("hidden")

xo.
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:iconoldest-boy:
thank you.
truelly appreciated.
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:iconcabernetbard:
I sure can relate to this, well done :)
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:iconyouinventedme:
Could you refrain
from embracing that
permanently
painted reaction



:clap:


xo!
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