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and all the things... by ~oldest-boy:iconoldest-boy:



I'm in my underwear,
     writing

because my pen was closer
than my pants,

the sun is practically
drawing the curtains itself
so I finish the job
with a squint,

this time last year
I had no underwear
and the windows
were boarded up,

It's so much easier
to get out of bed
and step on my pen
than a broken crack-pipe
or a dirty needle,

hope and desperation
at my sides,
knowing time will drown me
in it's wake,
     I wonder things;

what Robert Lowell could have possibly known about life,

how the blind know they are awake,

if Erika got my letter,

lost to myself
     for a second

smiling like a retard with a popsicle,

a poet with a cigarette
    in the midst of all I've seen
©2008-2009 ~oldest-boy
:iconoldest-boy:

Author's Comments

[ full title: "and all the things you cannot say" ]

title plucked from the third line
from a piece done by an amazing poetess
who will remain unnamed.

[ sentiment: rosaries and dollar bills ]

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:iconkneelingglory:
Amazing, as usual. I love the humour in the first two stanzas, and the almost idle thoughts at the end. You have a talent for bringing the everyday things into sharp, exquisite detail :)

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:icongetyourgrip:
did you mean to say, because your pen was closer than your pants?
I like this.

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Married to the pen,
and we're both having an affair
with the page.
:iconcartheinsane:
An interesting read. :)

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~I am a poet~
:iconformaniac:
I adored the beginning and the end so much, I had to share those lines with my friend.
Just thought you should like to know.
:)

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I had the blues because I had no shoes until upon the street, I met a man who had no feet.
~Ancient Persian Saying
:iconmasquedeloup:
I'm in my underwear,
writing

because my pen was closer
then my pants,


Love that part, and it's a really unique piece altogether. :heart:

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Only in America do banks leave both doors open and then chain the pens to the counters.
And only in America do people order double cheeseburgers, large fries, and a diet coke.
:iconmikah93:
Heartbreaking. But inspiring, and insightful.

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Love is not my playing field. It's my mine field.
:iconoldest-boy:
thank you, very much,
for reading.

--
'SHARKS DON'T SLEEP' a collection of poems by Eric Hamilton.
:iconoldest-boy:
thank you :)

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'SHARKS DON'T SLEEP' a collection of poems by Eric Hamilton.
:iconoldest-boy:
haha,
thank you.

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'SHARKS DON'T SLEEP' a collection of poems by Eric Hamilton.

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