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43rd chorus

cummings,
I see it now, my man,
I see it;

the beauty behind dis
order dis
array dis away
dat
      away

there's always (this place!)
and

th
is
pl
ac
e!

this finely tuned (electric rise
of a begging body's frail-
fuzz to rising epiphany)
weaponry
         aimed from.tattoos.to.crayons.at.the.heart

you've chiseled away
their gods their coffin-walls their fixed form attire their machines

they're machines
but-you-and-now-
me;
(here!)
to show them

(my)them.
sometimes I just breath his air.
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:iconzoeil:
zoeil Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2009   Photographer
yes. :heart: :+fav:
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2010
thank you.
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:iconverilyartwork:
verilyartwork Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009
i think i just love you now
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2009
word? word.
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:icontorturedremembrance:
TorturedRemembrance Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2009
I could kick myself for not taking the time to read your latest sooner, because this is just so great. :heart:
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
don't stress it.
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:iconshadowedacolyte:
ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2009
A cheerful paean. Thanks.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
oh boy.
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:icontwistedalyx:
TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
the beauty behind dis
order dis
array dis away
dat
away

weaponry
aimed [link].heart

you've chiseled away
their gods their coffin-walls their fixed form attire their machines
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009
yamang.
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:icontwistedalyx:
TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yamang?
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2009
yeah man
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:icontwistedalyx:
TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Well alright. :D
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:icontwistedalyx:
TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
yamang? :?
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:iconetre-aime:
etre-aime Featured By Owner May 30, 2009
pinned.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2009
word.
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:iconetre-aime:
etre-aime Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2009
to your mother?
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2009
yeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahboyeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.
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:iconetre-aime:
etre-aime Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2009
boiiiiiiiii*

get it right, lawddd child.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2009
wot evoh

eye dew wu deye wont
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:iconetre-aime:
etre-aime Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2009
boi,
keep givin me lip. i will pop a cap.
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:iconpardonm3:
pardonM3 Featured By Owner May 28, 2009
Huzzah!
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 28, 2009
muzzah!@
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:iconpiscesandthediamonds:
Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
yes and
there's always (this place!)
and

th
is
pl
ac
e!

yesss

and :clap: + :heart:
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
yes!
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:iconpseudometry:
pseudometry Featured By Owner May 27, 2009   Writer
Clever and pretty damn funny in parts. Plus, I absolutely love these lines:
you've chiseled away
their gods their coffin-walls their fixed form attire their machines
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
thank you; fo'real.
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:iconpseudometry:
pseudometry Featured By Owner May 27, 2009   Writer
:D
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:iconwinterfang:
Winterfang Featured By Owner May 26, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
"the beauty behind dis
order dis
array dis away
dat
away"

Stellar.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
thanks.
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:iconnunheh:
nunheh Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
I see the many jack kerouac fans: Jack's Grave used to be covered with broken bottles of liquor. It was a sign of solidarity', That was in Lowell , Mass. Then they put a thity-foot chain link fence around it with a steel cage locked entance. About 3am I scrambled the fence and sat on his grave, took two slugs of vodka, and then poured the rest of the pint over the grave, parked the empty bottle on the tombstone.....

Then it was off to the Concord shrine of Thoreau . Curiously enough, one was supposed to pick up a stone along the path and toss it onto a big pile next to his grave.

Instead I walked up to the big pile, took a stone off and chucked it into the woods.

A Waldon pond day of rebellion. The better sort, the solidarity, inicated a wide range of lack of amusement. Including one who threw his stone at me. I caught it and tossed it onto the pile for him
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
haha.
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 26, 2009   Writer
that was a genuine hoot
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
thanks my man.
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:iconwonderlustqueen:
wonderlustqueen Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
I love it when writers play with form and structure. well done.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
thanks for reading.
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:iconthroughangelseyes7:
throughangelseyes7 Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
clears your lungs out...
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
word.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner May 25, 2009   Writer
"their fixed form attire"

it is theirs, isn't it?
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:iconnunheh:
nunheh Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
I see the many jack kerouac fans:Jack' Grave used to be covered with broken bottles of liquor. It was a sign of solidarity', That was in Lowell , Mass. then they put a thity-foot chain link fence around it with with a steel cage locked entance. About 3am I scrambled the fence ansd sat on his rave, took two slugs of vodka, and then poured the resrt over the grave, parked the empty bottle on the tombstone.....The it was off to the Concord shrine of Thoreau . Curiously enough, one was supposed to pick up a stone along the path and toss it onto a big pile next to his grave.

Instead I walked up to the big pile, took a stone off and chucked it into the woods.

A Waldon pond day of rebellion. The better sort, the solidarity, inicated a wide range of lack of amusement. Including one who through his stone at me. I caught it and tossed it onto the pile for him
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
ohyes.
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:iconotherwise-duck:
otherwise-duck Featured By Owner May 25, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
bravo, bravo, bravo.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
thank you.
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:icongetyourgrip:
GetYourGrip Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
you clever son of a bitch you.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
haha (oh;
stop.)






















:roll:
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:icongetyourgrip:
GetYourGrip Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
you son of a bitch you.
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