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the bus
roared away
with a flock
of luxury sedans
in its shadow

as my run
slowed to
defeat.

I spit
downwind
into their distance
before lighting
a cigarette

and inhaling
its expensive smoke
into the vulnerability
of exhausted
lungs.

a young-
woman
       wrinkled
her forehead at me

gasping through
my clouds
with her eyes
closed

walking her son
like a seeing-
eye-dog.

I laid down
with my back-pack
for a pillow
and

the swish and
growl of traffic
began to
         sing me
to sleep

when a tiny-
old man
came hobbling past
with everything

he owned
swelling
through the bars
of a shopping-
cart

click-
clacking every
crack on the
sidewalk.

his face was
to the sky

and the moon’s
mouth had rounded
as if hungry
for
   the stars.
sleeping at a bus stop.
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:iconotherwise-duck:
otherwise-duck Featured By Owner May 19, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
I really like this.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2010
thanks.
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5117kingcobra Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2009
As my run slowed down to defeat.

Running, walking, hopping, skipping, ambling, scuffling,
trudging, we ask so much of de feet. -Pa (Bad joke)
Great poem (Bad stuff can be good if it comes at the right time). The real "heartbreak" is when good shit happens at a bad or inopportune moment or time.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
you can cut off my feet
I will never be

de-feeted.
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:iconredsky-atnight:
RedSky-atNight Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2009
I love this style of writing, its fantastic :).
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
thank you kindly.
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:iconwyn--:
Wyn-- Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009
Great, I love the flow and rhythm. I also get the feeling you read Kerouac.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2009
sometimes.
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:iconmidnight-december:
midnight-december Featured By Owner May 28, 2009
this poetry
makes me want
to fall hard
in love with you
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 28, 2009
some would say
poetry
is just a sly
arrangement
of words.
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:iconxxduckyxx:
xXduckyXx Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
and again holy shit love
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
thank you.
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:iconxxduckyxx:
xXduckyXx Featured By Owner May 28, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
oh no need to thank me love
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:iconiampoetry:
iamPoetry Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome!
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
thanks.
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:iconottersandsky:
ottersandsky Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
with a flock
of luxury sedans
in its shadow


I feel like I'm making this trip with you.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
well it was more or less
just missing the bus to jersey;
and ending up having to sleep it off
in the streets of NYC.
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:iconottersandsky:
ottersandsky Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
And you could make that rhyme.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
:P
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:iconottersandsky:
ottersandsky Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
Why is it trying to lick its face?
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
not sure.
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:icontigermoth99:
Tigermoth99 Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
This is excellent, Eric. Love the images here, esp "walking her son / like a seeing- / eye-dog" and "the moon’s / mouth had rounded / as if hungry / for / the stars."

Great work as always :)
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
thanks my man.
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:iconpiscesandthediamonds:
Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner May 24, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
so vivid and well written, the end slays me :heart:
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
I want to show you something;

check your notes.
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:iconcornerstoneascetic:
CornerstoneAscetic Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
when a tiny-
old man
came hobbling past
with everything

he owned
swelling
through the bars
of a shopping-
cart

click-
clacking every
crack on the
sidewalk.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
:D
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:icongetyourgrip:
GetYourGrip Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
this is excellent.
i've noticed your poetry says
a lot more than you do not.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
thanks for reading; my man.
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:icongetyourgrip:
GetYourGrip Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
i think i worded that wrong,
and no problem.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
i dig whatchu dug though.
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:icongetyourgrip:
GetYourGrip Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
kay cool.
thought so.
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:icontheobviouschild:
TheObviousChild Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
It's been two years since I last Greyhound-ed (Vancouver -- San Francisco, holy shit 60 hours there and back). Seriously need to do it again, this poem brought it all back!
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
I'm a traveler myself; as you can only
experience so much in one area; and although
I often feel like I don't belong in this decade
or this universe, or this country...

its a good feeling to switch seats on a sinking ship.
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:icontheobviouschild:
TheObviousChild Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
Imagine how I feel, in this tiny country, on this tiny island...

Definitely coming to live in North America when I get my PhD, and I intend to drive all over the place.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
word.
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:iconcephcepheus:
CephCepheus Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
Ooer is all I shall say to that, having Greyhounded precisely the same path, despite living in the UK.
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:icontheobviouschild:
TheObviousChild Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
Did you have a bad experience? Mine was pretty good -- people were shocked to hear that we hadn't encountered any nutters/junkies on our travels as apparently Greyhounds are notorious for them. But whatever, I enjoyed it in a sort of perverse way. Next time I'd get the express bus though, rather than opting to visit Weed, CA and all the other one-horse places we went through! (I'm also in the UK and no bus/train ride here has ever seemed long ever since!)
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CephCepheus Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
Not a bad experience at all! I took a fellow traveller's advice while in Victoria and took the Greyhound instead of the train, to avoid long stop-overs in the shady region of Seattles that the train from Vancouver apparently arrives in. The bus journey was quite fascinating actually; a fat, cigar-chewing Mexican, a heavily tattoed schoolteacher from Arizona, and some mean-looking kids at the back who all took a shine to me because of my accent. It was a very good journey, but not one I'd eagerly repeat.
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:icontheobviouschild:
TheObviousChild Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
I kind of know what you mean -- when I arrived in SF I did need to sleep for about a full 24 hours to recover from the sleeplessness of sitting upright on a bus for a whole day and a half. I also met some characters -- an old black lady from Louisiana who wanted to adopt my bloke, a waiter from Portland who asked me to marry him, etc. I'd do it again, although I might have a horrible experience the next time which would ruin all the romance I've attached to it!
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
I vow to visit your 'Kingdom.'
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:icontheobviouschild:
TheObviousChild Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
Bring sweaters!
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
;)
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:iconavolatilecalm:
AVolatileCalm Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
fuck.

the small time away from here (seemingly) as done you very, very well.. this is lovely
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
Yeah i'm keep alot of my poetry to myself these days;
so that people who buy my pamphlet(s) get something
they haven't already read.
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:iconavolatilecalm:
AVolatileCalm Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
fair enough :) nevertheless, always enjoyed reading you
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
likewise;

fortunately
for those who rely on dA for their
daily dosage of poetry;

I write enough
that I'll always have a few
poems to spill here.

it's hard to avoid this community;
I love it.
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:iconavolatilecalm:
AVolatileCalm Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
very glad to hear
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
:D
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:iconpixiespoisonedpen:
PixiesPoisonedPen Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
and the moon’s
mouth had rounded
as if hungry
for
the stars.

Beautiful ending

:rose:
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