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taco bell bags
and half drunken
gatorade bottles

pad the floor
and occasionally
prevent me
from breaking in time

while the sun
is delighting in the burst
     of cracks
that decorate the windshield
like some sort of
            satanic snowflake
that glows
ever led-
             light chasing
its face
            to fire

the aged iris
of this still-
seeing
      gunmetal
vessel

a thousand copper gods
retired to the mire
of soda-cup-
sweat
spitting echoes
in a slur
     of the prayers
we never did send

to the sky.
...
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:iconpseudometry:
pseudometry Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009   Writer
Some of the best, most vivid description I've read in a while. Really brings the scene alive, a delight to read.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2009
thanks as always....

P.S.

my chapbook is available online for 6 buckeroos.
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:iconpseudometry:
pseudometry Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2009   Writer
Yeah I saw, sweet deal
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2009
thanks
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JaiGuruDeVat Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2009
i will never get my license with all these distractions.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2009
hshs


(haha)
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:iconjaigurudevat:
JaiGuruDeVat Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2009
shh.

( >>ha )
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:iconmoondrunk:
moondrunk Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009   Writer
you've just described my thursdays
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
word.
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:iconpiscesandthediamonds:
Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
love that bit that Shane pointed out :heart: i enjoy your projections and interpretations of the world :hug:
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
thanks for'eal.
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:iconajezzy:
AJezzy Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2009
welcome back.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
i'm like Mace
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:iconajezzy:
AJezzy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
highly flamable and smelly.

thats plesent.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2009
bhjxosgfedgfgjh
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:iconjenealia:
Jenealia Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2009   Writer
:clap:
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
:D
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2009   Writer
that glows
ever led-
light chasing
its face
to fire

the aged iris
of this still-
seeing
gunmetal
vessel

a thousand copper gods
retired to the mire
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
ljhfvyir684$$$
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:iconpiscesandthediamonds:
Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
naww that's what i was going to say :hug:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009   Writer
:smooch:
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:iconshadowedacolyte:
ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2009
Strong, visceral start, though you peter off at the end.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
thanks for the always

rigorous

honesty.
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:icontwistedalyx:
TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Wow.

The second and third stanzas are my favorites.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
thanks again.
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:icontwistedalyx:
TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome again.
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:iconrunfromthelight:
runfromthelight Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Stunner as ever. Makes me want to hit the road.
Missed you =)
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
likewise; nameless.
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Wyn-- Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
this defiantly reminds me of riding around in my friends car... he's one of those people that doesn't throw things away. again nice use of images, they fit the emotion of the poem. :)
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
thank you for reading.
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:iconplatopushpin:
PlatoPushpin Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
Each isolated image was really cool; the way you connected them all exceptionally so.
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
thanks man'
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009   Writer
serious mindtwists going on here.

i really connected with:

"the sun delights
in the burst of cracks
that decorate the windshield
like some sort of
satanic snowflake"


one question, when you say

"that glows
ever led"

did you mean "red"?
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:iconoldest-boy:
oldest-boy Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
no;

but I like the fact
that you thought that.
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